First Flash Fiction
So surgery slowed me down – a lot. I can already manage an hour or so of two-handed typing. Since the Big Reveal that I’m writing, it follows that I have to do something to keep up my work and practice. Many of you expressed interest. Here’s your first benefit of my Stabby McStabstab to the shoulder.
Concept: a weekly picture is posted, and the writer is challenged to produce one-hundred (more or less) words of some sort of fiction with a full plotline (beginning, middle and end). Here we go…
Transition Point
I believed I awoke on the wood-plank boardwalk. I felt sunlight on my shoulders. A figure in the tent waited, so I walked. The sawgrass and water made it real.
“Welcome,” the woman said. Her dark hair blew in the wind.
“This is the transition,” I said, “None of this is real.”
“That may vary based on your personal beliefs,” she nodded.
I chuckled. “All right, let’s go,” I said. “Can I ask how I died?”
“That’s not advised,” she said, “And against your contract.”
“Then put me back in the war,” I sighed.
The world vanished.
– – – – –
Yes, that’s it. One hundred words ain’t much, y’all.
Visit Rochelle’s Addicted to Purple if you want to play along. This is interesting and I may just do this shit again.
March 12, 2014 at 17:03
I think that’s really good. I liked the second half better than the first, the mystery of it. The two sentences that put me off a bit where “A figure in…” and the one right after that (the “made it real” part). Those last five lines are great. Make me want more.
March 12, 2014 at 17:05
I didn’t edit much, Trent. Good catch. The ‘made it real’ is as much foreshadowing as one can do in 100 words, though.
March 12, 2014 at 17:08
I would puke into my mouth and hold it there a good five minutes rather than try to write only 100 words. I never met an idea I couldn’t stretch well beyond what was actually required.
Anyway, hope you do more fiction stuff, you certainly got the imagination for it.
March 12, 2014 at 17:09
You should talk to some of the people I know about my verbosity when writing. I’m normally a Stephen King, so this kind of exercise is very, very good for Rants.
March 12, 2014 at 17:06
Too cool, Rants!
March 12, 2014 at 17:07
You should do this too, Whitelady.
March 12, 2014 at 17:20
hhmmm..I dunno, but yours was creative. I hope you do more.
March 12, 2014 at 17:37
I will. Give it a try. You write very well, Lady.
March 12, 2014 at 17:10
I like your take on the picture, good job.
March 12, 2014 at 17:11
Thanks, NAPR’r, hope it was a full tale in 100 words.
March 12, 2014 at 17:14
I think so. Fiction writing is my weakest skill, but I love reading what Matticus, DrAliMan, A Mixed Bag and now you come up with.
March 12, 2014 at 17:19
I’ll try to be regular in spite of my busted wing.
March 12, 2014 at 17:18
100 words – insanely difficult. Quite an intriguing story. (although I agree with Trent: cut the 1st 2 sentences – add “wood planked boardwalk” to end of the 3rd or something)
Again? Yeah, you should. This is good.
March 12, 2014 at 17:19
Thanks, PM. Like I said, no time to copyedit.
March 12, 2014 at 20:15
Best kind of writing – easy, stress free – and done! It is good
March 13, 2014 at 05:25
There is that.
March 12, 2014 at 17:35
Well done! I’m with Trent. Can you imagine me writing ONLY 100 words? I can’t, although you may want to. 🙄
March 12, 2014 at 17:38
You’re another that I’d exhort to try this form, Archon. Not because you’re wordy, but because you’re already a good writer.
March 13, 2014 at 02:49
Suggestion being seriously considered, I always need a blog theme. Now, where are those pesky prompts?? It’s okay, I see them. 🙂
March 13, 2014 at 05:26
Sweet.
March 12, 2014 at 18:23
Great take on the prompt. The end made me want to know more. I look forward to seeing you on more of these.
March 12, 2014 at 18:25
Thanks, Lewis (?), I appreciate it!
March 12, 2014 at 18:32
That’s a lot of imagery in only 100 words so I’d say you were successful. I may have to give this a try.
March 12, 2014 at 18:39
The dialogue’s the trick. I learned that from a master of it.
March 12, 2014 at 18:49
I am sure he/she is quite the Cunning Linguist (that one’s for you, Archon). 🙂
March 12, 2014 at 18:50
She is.
March 13, 2014 at 02:44
You talking dirty, or hep, and did you talk like that before the Bond movie? 😕 🙂
March 13, 2014 at 04:35
I am not “hep,” sadly. I’m more like, “tragically lame.”
March 13, 2014 at 05:49
*disagrees*
March 12, 2014 at 18:55
Clever. I’m left wondering who the woman was (devil? angel?), and what the contract was for.
March 12, 2014 at 18:56
I meant this as Sci Fi, so if that explanation helps…
March 12, 2014 at 18:58
It gives me a different perspective. Thanks.
March 12, 2014 at 19:00
No problem, Guapo!
March 12, 2014 at 19:38
Wow. Thank you for the glimpse into your fiction. This is intriguing and makes me want to read at least another 100 words. Please share more.
Hope your shoulder is feeling better.
March 13, 2014 at 05:27
It’s coming along. More later.
March 13, 2014 at 00:37
Welcome Rants; I’m glad you finally made it here! I wondered where you went… Didn’t know you had surgery scheduled, but I hope your recovery has gone well. We took similar approaches to this one. Adam’s photo immediately made me think of my ongoing story, of love, death and heaven… or hell. After life. Nice job!
March 13, 2014 at 05:29
I intentionally made it speculative, because of the picture.
March 13, 2014 at 13:17
Nice job!
March 13, 2014 at 13:36
Thanks!
March 13, 2014 at 13:48
You should check out the other stories… you start to know which writer will write what, but the quality each week is mazing! It’s quite addictive. 😉
March 13, 2014 at 14:24
I’ve already visited quite a few. The variety is amazing.
March 13, 2014 at 17:08
They really are. I look forward to each new prompt.
March 13, 2014 at 20:56
I can see why.
March 13, 2014 at 03:19
Welcome; an impressive debut.
March 13, 2014 at 05:29
Thanks Sandra!
March 13, 2014 at 05:45
I’ve been reading some of these Friday Fictioneers posts for about a month, but I haven’t tried my own yet. I enjoy the challenge of brevity, but I think 250 words is about the shortest I’ve somewhat succeeded at.
It’s interesting that he would rather live through war than die without the knowledge of how. Well done. I enjoyed it.
March 13, 2014 at 05:49
Awesome and thanks, Melanie!
March 13, 2014 at 07:53
Rants, welcome to Friday Fictioneers. We’re a diverse and friendly group and there are lots of good writers, so you’ll fit right in. Good use of changing the form of your story to highlight going from the intro to the conversation. I’m getting a good laugh from the comments, too. One hundred words can really be difficult, but it’s a great exercise in choosing the words that count. 🙂 Inviting all the writers in your comment section to stop by next week and give it a shot.
janet
March 13, 2014 at 08:22
Thanks, Janet. This was fun.
March 13, 2014 at 10:48
Great job! This little piece is worthy of going further.
March 13, 2014 at 11:09
Thank you!
March 13, 2014 at 13:21
Man, only a hundred words? I ramble to much. I don’t know if I could do it. Love this new side of you. Great better soon.
March 13, 2014 at 13:37
Yes, only 100.
March 13, 2014 at 15:46
For a while I was doing “Friday Drabbles” which are 100-word short stories. They are totally fun and frustrating at the same time. Brings out the editor in you. More please.
March 13, 2014 at 20:55
Roger!
March 13, 2014 at 23:22
Geeze! Red tape even after we die? Must be the other place. 🙂
March 14, 2014 at 05:45
Awesome!
March 14, 2014 at 11:38
Woke up in a place of beauty yet full of rules….sounds like Germany. 🙂
March 14, 2014 at 11:40
If I mentioned punctual trains, you’d know for certain.
March 14, 2014 at 11:41
UBahn yes, DBahn…not so punctual anymore.
March 14, 2014 at 11:45
Sad. I blame the French.
March 14, 2014 at 18:03
I believed, I chuckled – my favorite words of your whole story!
March 14, 2014 at 22:23
*smiling*
March 15, 2014 at 07:38
Welcome to Friday Fictioneers, Rants. I hope you’re feeling better soon. That was well written with good dialogue. It would make a great hook for a longer story.
March 16, 2014 at 08:49
Thank you, I may use the concept in my universe later.
March 15, 2014 at 10:16
Ah,if war is a better choice,good that his contract didn’t say that he could not go back-interesting take on the prompt and welcome aboard:-)
March 15, 2014 at 11:04
Thank you!
March 16, 2014 at 01:32
🙂
March 16, 2014 at 08:48
🙂
March 16, 2014 at 00:43
I have a book called 100 Sci-Fi short-short stories. It’s amazing what can be packed into only 100 words. I think that a lot of stories would benefit by some ruthless pruning of extraneous additions.
Good first publish. I look forward to reading more.
March 16, 2014 at 08:47
Thank you, and you’re right about pruning!
March 18, 2014 at 00:51
Good job, he should have read ALL the fine print in his contract. Lawyers can be blood suckers after all . . ha. Nan Oh, and Welcome!
March 18, 2014 at 06:26
They can be!
March 18, 2014 at 10:37
Welcome to the world of flash fiction. It’s perfect for those of us with a short attention span, like me. I enjoyed you story. Like the others, I wonder what the contract is all about. No one ever mentioned signing a contract to die. Disturbing, just like my cell phone contract!
March 18, 2014 at 10:44
My attention span is fine, just my wingspan right now is cut in half. Thanks!